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The trees are on fire.

Even in this perfect, sparkling black, the flames burn on. In shades of rust, of gold, of earth and of blood, they light up the skies in a closing cry before their fall.

The air is scrubbed clean. The heaviness of a long-time drought fades in this crisp new painting. The close, soupy atmosphere of ages previous has all but vanished, expelled in contempt by a colourful new reign.

The stars have never looked so sharp, like each is coated in diamonds and ice. Each point of light, so very far away for something so clear, has its own crown, a splendid jewel suspended on black velvet for the earth to envy.

The world is giving a vibrant final performance, one last play before the curtain falls and the theatre is emptied for the season. The stage is so brisk and beautiful, even though the audience knows that soon, this arena will be a bleak and deadened floor. And the trees put on a spectacular display, an act that will cause the winds to hail them with thunderous applause.

And there it is.

The lights have long dimmed, but the breezes come for an encore of excitement. Writhing and cascading, cold and sweet, loving and awe-struck. The trees bow once more, their eye-catching costumes slowly being shed in retirement, never to be reproduced, never to be rivalled, never to be equalled.

I stand in the middle of it all, watching this brilliant presentation with my own eyes. The winds are catching my hair and I catch their joy in turn. I breathe deep the very essence of a play well-shown, and I applaud, too. The air is coating my lungs in a delicious frost, so refreshing after the tired, muggy mists that have plagued me for months. The tiny pinpricks of light that serve as spotlights for this script are so very bright and dazzling, it makes me jealous of the sky that holds them.

As the autumn attire of the oaks and maples coat the ground beneath my feet, I sigh, my breath erupting in a plume of fog that laughs as it dances heavenward. I look about the auditorium. The ancient pink roses, now brown with age, seem not angered by summer's sudden departure from the cast, but rather relieved that their season is done, and they can sleep long and soft. The heat of a summer prolonged is fading out, tired with the constant upkeep of the divas that demand such constant attention.

And the trees.

Their act is one that will always bring the crowds back. They show such life even when their lives are so close to finished. They make sure that their performances are ever-yearned for, acting in such pure passion that everyone says there will never be any quite like them. They give themselves up for their craft, as any true professional would, so their fans will remember them for years to come. In search for the best show they could produce, the elms and beeches, the oaks and maples...all have sacrificed their own beings, subjecting themselves to a beautiful death for the masses to enjoy.

And so, for one autumn night, the trees are on fire.

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This is my entry for :iconthe-writers-study:'s "An Autumn Night" contest. Link to the journal for the contest be here: [link]

This made me so happy to write. Autumn is my favourite time of year, and I am so glad it's finally here. And getting to write about an autumn night is just...yes. Yes indeed. I enjoyed writing this piece.

Comments and critiques are so very loved. I can't get enough of what y'all think! Did I express my love of fall here, or do you leave with a feeling of dread for the coming season?

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~AryaMay Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great. I like your sense of imagery, and the emotions that you convey with something as simple as dying leaves- which by the way, even touched my senses, and I am one of the most cynical people that you will ever probably find on Earth :)

I suppose the only thing that sort of made me rise a brow was this line: "The ancient pink roses, now brown with age, seem not angered by summer's sudden departure from the cast, but rather relieved that their season is done, and they can sleep long and soft." It might just be a pet peeve of mine, but don't you think the amount of commas that you use in that line makes it sound sort of choppy?

But all in all, I like this piece of prose very much. Especially "Their act is one that will always bring the crowds back. They show such life even when their lives are so close to finished. They make sure that their performances are ever-yearned for, acting in such pure passion that everyone says there will never be any quite like them." Doesn't it remind you of human nature too, how we all yearn for a sense of immortality, a way to remembered after we hit the grave? There's almost a grave sense of beauty in those lines, at least to me.

Congrats on winning the contest~
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*HeadmistressMercedes Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are not the first person to remark on my obsession with commas, and I doubt you shall be the last, I'm afraid. Yes, I do tend to over-use those silly little winged dots. However, my rather weak defense is that there are thoughts I have, strings of consciousness, that never sound right if I put them in separate trains of thought.

Now, THAT verse you pointed out should have been separated. I can see that now. But that is generally the reason why I overuse the comma...spliting some of my thoughts makes them sound more awkward, in my mind.

OOooOOOOoooh, I never read those lines like THAT before!! Very observant of you, dearie! And very correct, too. Indeed, we yearn to leave our mark on the world in such a way that, even after we are buried 6 feet under, people still swoon at the very thought of our existance. Loverly!!

Thanks so much, dearie! Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks so much for the feedback! Muchly appreciated :hug:
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~bookbrink Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
D8
*whimpers*
I love this. I really got sucked in by all the imagery, and I love it. I really like the line where you describe the stars and especially the part about the trees being relieved that the season is over. It gave me goosebumps. I really like all the description, it's very flowery and it pops. Great job; you did a wonderful job on this. Autumn has got to be one of the prettiest seasons. I think you expressed your love for the season very well. I definitely got a sense of beauty and deep admiration for the cold and quiet. Very beautiful; good luck with the contest.
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*HeadmistressMercedes Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
D'awwwww!! :glomp: Thanks sweetie! I'm glad my love of fall came through here...it really is the bestest of seasons, in my mind. So vibrant and clean...that's how I best describe a good autumn: clean. After the heat and humidity of a heavy, hot summer, it's nice to have the air sparkle with snowflakes unshed and cool breezes :aww: Loves it!!

Thanks hun-bun! You too! :tighthug:
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~bookbrink Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nehehehehehe
Hun-bun. I like it.
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*HeadmistressMercedes Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
HUN-BUN!!!! :aww: It's cuz you're simply adorable!!
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~bookbrink Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nehehehehe *grins sheepishly*
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