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In her new satin gowns, she drowns.

A sad and shattered heart bound tight with nothing but
creamy lace and silver buttons.

Playing dress-up with the damned.
Hide the pieces of a broken heart amidst the splendor of velvet and silk to soak up the blood.

A little something I just thought up right now. Nothing much. Just kinda...did.

Comments and critiques are always very much adored.
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
This brings to mind both women of olden times with tight corsets and saddening happening as well as modern ones you dream of being princesses. Well said.
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It did sound like a harkening to an older era as I wrote it. Dunno how or why, but it did ^.^

Thanks hun! Glad you enjoyed it ^.^
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! And I believe it is most likey the use of words like "gowns" and the second stanza has a very Victorian feel to it. 
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That's probably it...a word not used much anymore. Also, the mention of lace and silver buttons together, connected with the word "gowns" conjures to mind a Victorian bustle dress from the upper class.
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Yeah that sounds about right. :D
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AtrociousLamb Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Professional Artist
Forlorn enchanting love.
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Just wonderful, like a delicacy it was gently constructed with the right creamy fillings and topped with a chocolatey cover. (and now I'm hungry! >.>) 
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oooooh now you too have made me so very hungry! You are your comparisons to delicious creamy-chocolate desserts! CURSE YOU!!

But no, seriously, thank you for the lovely comment ^.^
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
~ Hahaha! I'm so sorry, I just really like desserts and great poetry, that is all! ;) Tardessertwhore avatar for sherbet12 
And you are very welcome, it was well-deserved! Love I loved your piece very much! Heart 
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well, the two can go hand-in-hand so very well...*drools*...
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
True, true! Good poetry always gives me the munchies for something sweet! :writing: Tardessertwhore avatar for sherbet12 
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DarKnight0wl Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Ugh this is so delightfully satisfying to read. Haha I don't even know if that makes any sense but... It's like word candy. I love it! :happybounce: 
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, that makes perfect sense to me, m'dear! Like a good meal...you eat it, enjoy it, then sit back and say "AHHHHH!!" in splendor ^.^

Thanks sweetie! So happy you like it!
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Goosie-Boosie Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Omg. I really like this. You really do have a talent for painting with words
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
D'aww thanks hun!
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Goosie-Boosie Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
<3333
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TheBloodyEarth Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
dont know how much you're familiar (and if) with Vampire the Masquerade, but this reminds of a newly embraced Toreador vampire accepting her doomed existence
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I am not familiar with that...movie/book/TV show....but it's cool how I seemed to conjure images of it for you without even trying ^.^
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GothKoala439 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is short and beautiful and it gave me chills. :heart:
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks darlin!
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
I like this a lot!! Nice imagery. =D
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Merci beaucoup, cherie! It quite literally just popped into my head while I was a-sittin' at the computer.
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Haha, you're welcome! =) And sometimes the best things we write come about in that way, I think. An impromptu thought.
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savedbythespell Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Student Writer
Lovely!
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! So happy you liked it ^.^
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