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When dark storm clouds coat young maid's head,
She walks, with gloomy, lifeless tread.

Her eyes downcast, her fingers quake,
She dares the world to call her fake.

Her aura grey and mouth down-turned,
return to days of youth, she yearns.

Into herself, her form retreats
though her feet tread on well-worn streets.

To worlds of light and glitt'ring streams,
She hides herself in realms of dreams.
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The next entry in my lil' anthology, couplets. I chose to write about a young girl's longing to retreat into a place where she feels at home, when the world outside gets too loud and obnoxious.

Comments and critiques are always appreciated. The comment button will give you cookies if you push it! G'wan...cooooookies....
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~HeronAria Sep 25, 2012  Student Writer
I really relate to this... I don't know why though, but it's scary how much I relate to this!
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*HeadmistressMercedes Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think more people relate to it then it may seem...the yearning to return to days of youth is almost always there, in my opinion...some people may just not know it.
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~HeronAria Sep 30, 2012  Student Writer
I know I miss being a worry free kid. XD I'll never be able to go back to that.
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*HeadmistressMercedes Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's exactly what I miss...having other people do the worrying for me. It's rather selfish, but it's also the truth...who wants to worry?
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~HeronAria Oct 5, 2012  Student Writer
No one does! I love being care free. I even like it when people can tell me what to do when I can't make up my mind. I've just recently had to start making ALL OF MY own decisions.
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*HeadmistressMercedes Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I know...there's things for my apartment that I've had to get done myself (like getting insurance and stuff like that) and it takes me forever to do it because I'm literally scared to have to take on such a responsibility. I don't like it.
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~HeronAria Oct 5, 2012  Student Writer
Same here... I have to take baby steps...and call my parents frequently. XD
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*HeadmistressMercedes Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oooh yes, I constantly call and/or email my parents, and I stay with them most weekends (mostly cuz I hate where I live, but still.) I'm still trying to switch banks...something I've been meaning to do for a while...but I have to ask mommy dearest what I'm looking for in a credit card again...I forget what she told me >.< I feel so little :giggle:
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Lovely rhythm! Very nice imagery as well, love your last line!
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*HeadmistressMercedes Sep 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed it :)
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